The increase
in oil price is the risk faced by the economy nowadays. Its main cause is the
fear of the war occurred between Israel and Iran. The tension in the Middle
East led to the rise in oil price and resulted the recessions in past years. Recently,
Iran has attacked Israel embassies which lead to the further tension between
the two countries. US have threatened to act militarily against Iran if it still
does not stop the developing of nuclear weapons. It is said that the continuous
tension in the Middle East will aggravate the rise in oil price.
It is a pretty good summary. However, certain usage of words could be change. Maybe you could use fear of war occurring between Israel and Iran, instead of fear of the war occurred between Israel and Iran.
ReplyDeleteThe war refers to a particular war, however you did not mention any war previously in your summary.
...occurred (WF)
ReplyDeleteThe tension in the Middle East led to the rise in oil price (WF) and resulted (^) the recessions in past years. Recently, Iran has attacked Israel embassies which lead to the(RED) further tension between the two countries. US have(VF) threatened to act militarily against Iran if it still does not stop the developing(WF) of nuclear weapons. It is said that the continuous tension in the Middle East will aggravate(WW) the rise in oil price.